i stood
Capitalize I.
on the threshhold
Threshhold is spelled threshold.
he had his back turned to me.
Capitalize he.
i was angry. something i cant even remember...
Capitalize I and combine the two sentences.
but i stood there.
and waited.
Capitalize but and combine the two sentences or something like that.
things come blurry
Capitalize things and use another word besides come. Come doesn't make sense in the sentence.
i just saw something come flying at me.
Capitalize I and just isn't needed in the sentence.
all i remember was that it hurt. i was stunned. i was on the ground and something just... just snapped.
Capitalize all of the I's and the all. Also combine all three sentences.
i cried. i cried for all the years i was
Capitalize the I's.
i sobbed and sobbed and yelled at him. he was at my side. his hands hovered around me. his hair in his eyes, as always.
Capitalize everything that needs to be capitalized and try to change the beginnings of the sentences.
he was whispering, "i'm sorry, i'm sorry. please don't tell mom. please don't tell."
i turned away from him. nothing mattered anymore...... nothing mattered.
Capitalize he, I, please, and nothing.
little did i know that every year, he would get worse.
a knife being thrown at me,
horrible names,
and always the laughing
Capitalize little and a.
Your story was okay, but it could had been better. You never capitalized the beginning of each sentence and you often used the same words at the beginning of the sentence. Work on it a little more next time.
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